Page turners by Violet Carr Moore

Violet Carr Moore

Violet Carr Moore

The initial reviewer of the first chapters of my most recent mystery novel asked “Where’s the conflict?” The next critiquer said “Lacks tension.” The third reader followed with “Needs more action.” Number four summed it up with “Nothing worth turning the page in these chapters.”

Nothing. Worth. Turning. The. Page.

The manuscript took shape as my fifth NaNoWriMo challenge last November. My main focus was the gallop to the finish line before Thanksgiving dinner. Four months later the novel smelled worse than unrefrigerated limburger on a summer day. Only the title, Retribution, offered action, conflict and tension.

I tried to revise the first chapters, but it was like rerolling a pie crust. The more I worked, the tougher it became. After a face-to-face meeting with a couple of the reviewers, I choose to lay it aside and concentrate on my second NaNo novel. It started with tension and conflict on the first page. The characters pushed forward to form a strong plot and subplots. An arc and a justice-prevails conclusion followed.

A page turner.

 

Make a Scene: Crafting a Powerful Story One Scene at a Time

Jordan Rosenfeld

Jordan Rosenfeld

Jordan E. Rosenfeld will be the guest speaker at our next monthly meeting on Saturday, June  15, 2013, at the Four Points by Sheraton, 5115 Hopyard, Pleasanton.

Jordan E. Rosenfeld, author of the popular writing guide Make a Scene and the debut novel Forged in Grace, will teach you how to activate your writing, creating the page-turning energy of blockbuster fiction by mastering the essential building block: the scene. You’ll learn how to “demonstrate” not “lecture,” crafting compelling, textured, memorable scenes. You’ll never write the same way again.

Ms. Rosenfeld’s essays and articles have appeared in such publications as AlterNet.org, Publisher’s Weekly, The San Francisco Chronicle, The St. Petersburg Times, The Writer and Writer’s Digest magazine. Her book commentaries have appeared on The California Report, a news-magazine produced by NPR-affiliate KQED radio. She lives in Northern California with her Batman-obsessed son and Psychologist husband. Find out more at www.jordanrosenfeld.net

Eight Tri-Valley members published in Las Positas Anthology 2013

Eight members of Tri-Valley Writers were published in All That Remains, the Las Positas College 2013 anthology.  A  publication ceremony celebrated these and other authors on May 11, 2013, where they each received a complimentary book. 

Poetry

Hector Timourian: “Abraham’s Hope” – First Prize Winner 

Deborah Jordan Bernal: “Get Off the Road” and “Dreams”

Susan Condeff: “Pen Over Paper”

Alice Kight: “Summer” and “John Denver’s Voice”

Marilyn Slade: “Freedom”

Prose

Stacey Gustafson: “Hair Today Gone Tomorrow” and “He’s Not That Into Me”

Julaina Kleist-Corwin: “Stepping Stones”

Mary Ann Shaffer: “The Medic”

Alice Kight poems published

Alice Kight

“To The Dandelion,” a poem by Alice Kight, was published in the Spring 2013 issue of Song of the San Joaquin.

Alice Kight received Honorable Mention for her poem “Away” in the March contest for the California Federation of Chaparral Poets

Arleen Eagling published in Thema

Arleen Eagling

Arleen Eagling

Arleen Eagling’s short story “Half a Good Chance,” has been accepted for publication by the Thema Literary Society. It will appear in  A Week and a Day summer 2013 issue.  

May 2013 President’s Message by Paula Chinick

Paula Chinick

Paula Chinick

 

There is an old saying that you get back more than what you give. It has been true for me. As a volunteer for the Tri-Valley Writers and other nonprofit organizations in the area, I have had opportunities to meet people I would never have encountered otherwise. Many of these people have become lifelong friends. As a Tri-Valley volunteer, you are given an opportunity to work alongside other members and learn more about the club. I encourage you to volunteer and learn new skills that can make you feel good about yourself. It also looks good on your bio.

Sweet News about Self-Promotion by Lani Longshore

Lani Longshore

Lani Longshore

I self published a second quilting science fiction novel, When Chenille Is Not Enough, with coauthor Ann Anastasio. We were offered a free ad in the program for the Studio Art Quilt Associates conference in April. Since quilters are our target audience, we jumped at the opportunity. We didn’t read the fine print, however, which stipulated the size of the ad (small).

I found myself on a deadline with the wrong skill set, trying to think like an ad exec and create the most impact with the fewest words. In desperation, I typed “Once again, quilters save the world from space aliens– this time with ice cream.” Ann thought the ad was great, the editor of the program was pleased (whether because she liked the copy or because I made deadline is a question I preferred not to ask), and I went on to the next task.

Then I needed copy for the postcard we created as part of our publicity materials. I stared at a blank screen, deadline approaching. “Self,” I said, “don’t reinvent the wheel.” I used the same tagline on the postcard, and in the short description for our Smashwords page. “Self,” I said, “maybe this is your elevator pitch.”

Thank heavens for critique partners, who showed me the truth–this is my promotion gimmick! I’m not sure how, but sometime soon I’m going to have an ice cream party for the book. I might even do traveling parties for my friends brave enough to open their homes to me.

I’m thinking of sewing a chenille ice cream cone as a visual aid. Yes, it’s silly, but it’s also attention getting, and that’s what counts. 

May 18, 2013: Young Adult at Heart: How Voice, Subject Matter and Characterization Separate YA from Adult Genre

Gretchen McNeill photo 2Gretchen McNeill will be the guest speaker at our next monthly meeting on Saturday, May  18, 2013, at the Four Points by Sheraton, 5115 Hopyard, Pleasanton.

Gretchen McNeil is an opera singer, clown, and writer. She has written the Young Adult horror POSSESS about a teen exorcist which debuted in 2011. Her follow up, TEN was released in 2012, and her third novel 3:59 is scheduled for fall of this year.  She is currently working on a Young Adult mystery/suspense series Don’t Get Mad, which will begin in 2014.

Gretchen is a former coloratura soprano, the voice of Mary on G4′s Code Monkeys and she sings with the LA-based circus troupe Cirque Berzerk. She blogs with The Enchanted Inkpot and is a founding member of the vlog group the YARebels where she can be seen as “Monday.” She is represented by Ginger Clark of Curtis Brown, Ltd. Find out more about Gretchen at http://www.gretchenmcneil.com.

J. K. Royce publishes first novel

Pilz-J.K. Royce J. K. Royce has published Pilz, her first novel. It is a suspense story that explores the sleazy underside of the medical profession, a world she witnessed when she was a state assistant attorney general in Michigan.  Pilz is available on amazon.com in printed and Kindle versions. 

Vicky Hudson participates in Pulitzer Remix poetry project

Congratulations to Vicky Hudson, a participant in the Pulitzer Remix project which unites 85 poets to create found poetry from the 85 Pulitzer Prize in Fiction-winning texts. Beginning April 1, each poet will write and post one poem per day on the project website, http://www.pulitzerremix.com. The project will generate more than 2,500 found poems.